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Old 06-02-2010   #1
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First sporting event, first post from that event, first attempt at cropping, first attempt at editing.

Go ahead and jump in with C&C with both feet...anxious to learn.


Intensity...



Gotta include a black and white of my daughter



Did I mention that my daughter is also a beauty queen? Beauty and the Beast.


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Old 06-02-2010   #2
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Hello kevhol and welcome aboard.

Overall these are some nice shots with good tight framing/cropping.

A few suggestions on each,

1) Excellent focus and sharpness on the player. One issue is the timing may be off a little. Is she pitching, maybe a tad sooner would have got her arm in the pitching motion. She could be standing there about to get hit.

2) Nice idea but the focus seems to be off a bit. The helmet is very sharp but the face and EYES seem a little soft [edit]. This could be much better if those eyes were sharp as the face mask. Also the lighting is VERY Good for inside a helmet. Nice job on that.

3) Nice black and white photo but it could improve with the face and eyes.

4) Wow! You have a very beautiful daughter. Beautiful smile and nice pose. The white balance appears to be off a little. She's seems to be too orange on my screen. You may want to cool down a little.

Overall, very nice. Thanks for sharing and please share more.

Andy

Last edited by griffina6; 06-02-2010 at 03:11 PM.. Reason: EYES seem a little soft (not sharp)
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Old 06-02-2010   #3
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Thank you Andy for taking the time to look and critique these. They are my firsts. I've coach girls softball for years and decided to take my daughter's senior year off and shoot it.

Funny about the 1st photo. I never thought of it from the stand point of the ball being hit back at her. I have several shots of her pitching, but only one with the ball in flight.

I captured the feeling in #2, but have to shoot so quickly that I have to use autofocus and it missed the target of her face.

#3...I have good shots with more of the face of other girls, just not my daughter.

#4...thanks, now looking at it it does look orange. Is that something I can change in pp? I'm trying to learn...

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Old 06-02-2010   #4
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In most photo editing programs you can adjust the color balance or white balance. If you are shooting RAW you can sometimes get better results from adjustments. I tend to make white balance adjustments in Adobe Camera Raw before opening a file in Photoshop.

I hope you don't mind but just to test I downloaded a copy of your image and clicked on an area that I thought should be white in Camera Raw and it gave this result. Please let me know if you want me to remove the image.

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Color balance is off on the beauty queen one. Pretty good fix above. The Intensity one seems to have the focus on the wrong part. I'd think her eyes should be sharp and the rest blurred. Others agree?
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Andy, thanks, that looks beautiful and please keep it posted.

Pickles, I agree. With the fast shooting I had to do the auto focus "auto focused" on the helmet cage. Anyway to change this in pp?
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Anyway to change this in pp?
Nope. Can't fix focus after the point.
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Old 06-02-2010   #8
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Mr Pickles I agree that if the focus was on the face/eyes it would be much improved.

and as swampler stated above the focus you get is what you are stuck with.

kevhol - you shoudl really shoot the "intensity" shot again. Use the back button to focus on the eyes with everything else (lighting, exposure, crop, etc..) the same and I think you would have a great shot.

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Thanks for the input. I appreciate your time. All these shots are live, game time stuff. So having the opportunity to reshoot may take some time (weeks). Here's another girl in the same photo with better focus on the face, or at least I think it is...

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The last one does have the face/eyes very well focused. Do a little shadows/highlights adjustment to brighten the face. Then a little overall sharpening, and I always brush a little extra sharpening for the eyes.

Will they allow you to shoot during practice, rather than waiting for a game?


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