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Old 12-21-2008   #1
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From todays fashion/casual shoot with model jessyka


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Old 12-21-2008   #2
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Great lighting - but she looks a little "stiff"?
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Old 12-21-2008   #3
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If her left hand was moved around so that we saw her thumb, with her hand on her butt, and the right hand was straightened out a bit and flat on her leg it would improve her curves and be more feminine and perhaps more relaxed.
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I agree, she looks slightly uncomfortable. Do you have any other pics from the session?
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Old 12-22-2008   #5
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The picture is good but the area between her right forarm and body might be better with a little seperation
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Old 12-22-2008   #6
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As you can see from the motion in the hair in the image it was shot with the wind blowing strait on her and in northern england in mid winter it was really cold and i agree with the above comments it does show, but i also think models deserve medals for the lengths they try to go to to get the image. More to follow from this session in the coming weeks. Thanks for the comments so far, their appreciated greatly

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Old 12-29-2008   #7
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There she is... posing for the camera I have that problem with my better half. Picture of her posing on a background.
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Things that I see are:

Green pole growing from head.

Her waist looks unflattering on her right side. Just looks odd in this shot.

Interesting background but my attention is drawn to the white graffiti on the green thing for some reason. Graffiti is more interesting than model in this shot.

Very beautiful but stiff model.

Nice lighting and very good overall.

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Old 12-29-2008   #9
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Things that I see are:

Green pole growing from head.

Her waist looks unflattering on her right side. Just looks odd in this shot.

Interesting background but my attention is drawn to the white graffiti on the green thing for some reason. Graffiti is more interesting that model in this shot.

Very beautiful but stiff model.

Nice lighting and very good overall.

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Pretty much sums it up.
The green strut/pole and waistline were immediate thoughts, alongside the stiff-ish pose. All said and done, however, it wouldn't take much to make this great - the model is terrific and you guys work well together.
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I see three main areas that would help improve this image...the lighting is very nice.
1.The low camera angle amplifies the hunched shoulders...this is part of what makes her look so uncomfortable.
2. the weight is on the near leg to the camera....making both the leg and her tooche look bigger than normal.
3. both hands are static and at same level....either moving to the back side as other suggestion or even placing thumb in pocket....anything to remove the static look.
Other than those nits think she will be an asset to use more with some further directions.


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