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Old 11-01-2010   #1
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Had a great time shooting this lovely model. C&C always appreciated.

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Old 11-01-2010   #2
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Both shots shows how fit she is. The first one is better posed and lit. The second with her head tilted the way you have it does not show her eyes very well. And, her left cheek has gone white without detail.
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Thank you very much for the feedback!
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Personally I would do a tighter crop on the right of the second image. That car in the background does nothing to the image other than create a distraction.
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Really like the model and your use of DOF and the natural light. However the car/sign in #2 and sign in #1 are bothersome. Maybe try a tighter crop or just remove the sign in #1 ?
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Thanks for the feedback on the crops. Initially I wanted to crop for an 8.5X11 print but those background distractions are very noticeable.

Here is another photo that I took cropped a little better along with another picture. Hopefully these are a little better and C&C welcomed.
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Old 11-03-2010   #7
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The crop looks a lot better.

Great shots and love the abs !!
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Great pictures, maybe zipper could be up. A little distracting but then again I am a novice.
(darker fabric catches eye)

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She's stunning and you did a beautiful job with her.

I agree about the crop in #2 but this is one terrific series.


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