I'm A Work In Progress - PhotoCamel

timmyster · 07-22-2009

I am still in the beginning learning curve and have not had much time to shoot, due to illness in the family. Here is my try at portrait shooting. And I know I need a hair light, but other than that, any C&C is welcomed!

matelow · 07-22-2009

Overall very nice. It looks a little blown out on the forehead and cheek tho. I like the dreamy look and how you have dodged the eyes - they look good. However, they could be sharper. If you have applied a softening effect, then masking the eyes completely or partially would do it. Moving the light further to the subjects right would have helped with modelling.

gsk · 07-22-2009

Very pretty model.
Agree with what matelow said about the blown areas and the eyes.

timmyster · 07-22-2009

Thank you for your feedback! I am hoping to learn alot from more experienced photographers like yourselves! Hope to use that food for thought and post more this weekend, I have a family gathering on Saturday and will be taking plenty of ourdoor pics

Rain Lily · 07-22-2009

Did you take out any under-eye circles? There seems to be a discrepancy (sp?) between left and right eye/cheek area, where the subject's left eye seems to have a natural circle under it, but her right eye doesn't. It might be from the light on her left cheek (camera right).

Pretty photo. I think personally that the dodging of the eyes was a bit too much and would like to see more contrast in the eyes. But I love your background lighting.

patterfr · 07-23-2009

BG lighting is cool.
Pretty model with pretty smile.
I agree about the highlights on the face and think that if you took the exposure down a little the face there would be less blown highlights on the face and more contrast. AS it is, it's an appealing shot of this beautiful lady though.
Keep on posing and welcome to the Camel

07-22-2009	#1
timmyster Alpaca Location: N.W. Iowa Posts: 13 CamelKarma: 180 Editing OK?: Ask first Gallery \| Blog	I'm A Work In Progress I am still in the beginning learning curve and have not had much time to shoot, due to illness in the family. Here is my try at portrait shooting. And I know I need a hair light, but other than that, any C&C is welcomed! __________________ Members don't see ads in threads. Register your free account today and become a member on PhotoCamel - Your Friendly Photo Forum, gaining access to posting privileges, contests, free plug-ins and other downloads, unlimited online storage for your photographs, reviews, free marketplace listings, and much more.
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07-22-2009	#2
matelow Llama Location: Cincinnati Posts: 505 CamelKarma: 8740 Editing OK?: Yes Gallery \| Blog	Re: I'm A Work In Progress Overall very nice. It looks a little blown out on the forehead and cheek tho. I like the dreamy look and how you have dodged the eyes - they look good. However, they could be sharper. If you have applied a softening effect, then masking the eyes completely or partially would do it. Moving the light further to the subjects right would have helped with modelling.

07-22-2009	#3
gsk PhotoCamel Supporter Dromedary Posts: 1,350 CamelKarma: 12208 Editing OK?: Yes Gallery \| Blog	Re: I'm A Work In Progress Very pretty model. Agree with what matelow said about the blown areas and the eyes.
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07-22-2009	#4
timmyster Alpaca Location: N.W. Iowa Posts: 13 CamelKarma: 180 Editing OK?: Ask first Gallery \| Blog	Re: I'm A Work In Progress Thank you for your feedback! I am hoping to learn alot from more experienced photographers like yourselves! Hope to use that food for thought and post more this weekend, I have a family gathering on Saturday and will be taking plenty of ourdoor pics
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07-22-2009	#5
Rain Lily Camel Breath Location: Louisiana Posts: 11,763 CamelKarma: 60670 Editing OK?: Yes Gallery \| Blog	Re: I'm A Work In Progress Did you take out any under-eye circles? There seems to be a discrepancy (sp?) between left and right eye/cheek area, where the subject's left eye seems to have a natural circle under it, but her right eye doesn't. It might be from the light on her left cheek (camera right). Pretty photo. I think personally that the dodging of the eyes was a bit too much and would like to see more contrast in the eyes. But I love your background lighting.
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07-23-2009	#6
patterfr Photocamel Master Location: New Jersey Posts: 7,596 CamelKarma: 50965 Editing OK?: Yes Gallery \| Blog	Re: I'm A Work In Progress BG lighting is cool. Pretty model with pretty smile. I agree about the highlights on the face and think that if you took the exposure down a little the face there would be less blown highlights on the face and more contrast. AS it is, it's an appealing shot of this beautiful lady though. Keep on posing and welcome to the Camel __________________ Members don't see ads in threads. Register your free account today and become a member on PhotoCamel - Your Friendly Photo Forum, gaining access to posting privileges, contests, free plug-ins and other downloads, unlimited online storage for your photographs, reviews, free marketplace listings, and much more.
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