The second change

[mrmpro]

This was the models first time to pose. And I like to work with low light on dark backgrounds. But I have a hell of a lot to learn.
I'm no pro and I doing this because I love it. And I'm proud of the results.
I'm also want to know what other people may think so lets here it.
Greetings,
Martin

[tomrock]

Technically this is nice -- good lighting and processing but I'm not as happy with the models expression and I wish she wasn't looking out of the corner of her eye. I wish she was looking straight ahead.

Another thing you may want to try is a hairlight to add a little sparkle to the left of the frame.

[Benji]

(Copy) "I also want to know what other people may think so lets hear it."

Martin,

A nice experimental image. The only way to learn photography is to do exactly what you are doing namely, shoot, get critique, then reshoot and get another critique, etc, etc. Eventually you will make absolutely every mistake known to mankind and one day you will get beautiful images. Then they will invent an entirely new set of guidelines so we can make an entirely new set of mistakes.

I like profile images. Some people have a nice profile, and some don't. My profile makes me look like a Neanderthal, so I don't allow anyone to photograph me that way. In my humble opinion, the young lady in your image does not have that great of a profile either. She may be pretty in other poses, but I don't believe this is the most flattering way to depict her. In my Rules of Good Portraiture tutorial http://www.photocamel.com/forum/tuto...rtraiture.html I cover most of the rules but I don't think profiles are covered in it. So lets give it a shot here.

In your profile, her body is turned perfectly, a 45 degree angle to the camera, and she has a proper receiving area in front of her face. The main light was too low however. It is at the three o'clock position instead of the correct one o'clock position. Raising it up would get the correct one o'clock position. Her face is turned just a little bit too much toward the camera. The viewer should not be able to see any of the rear eye (except maybe her eyelashes) nor should any of her far cheek be able to be seen. Lastly her eyes should be straight ahead.

Keep it up, you're off to a good start!

Benji

[mrmpro]

Woow Benji. Thanks for taking the time to review my work. And nice to see The rules of good portraiture. That I will print out and put it on my softbox:-D I will learn and try to do it better:-D
Thanks again

[mrmpro]

Sorry Tomrock. Also thanks for your comments. I know that I need a hairlight but only have to softboxes at the moment. I'm working on it to get another set of lights to fill in the gaps:-D
Thanks

Martin

[tomrock]

You could use a softbox for a hairlight -- it's not ideal but it would work for this.

[mrmpro]

I will try it next time.. I hope it doesn't fall down then
Thanks again

[kgphoto]

Just put up a piece of foam core covered with crumpled and then flattened tin foil. It will work great as a hair light and is cheap.