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Old 08-07-2017   #1
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The color is partially de-saturated, and any impressions,
critique, remarks etc about the effect/mood of the color
would be especially welcome. Acoarst the rest is also up
for critique. Another detail I'd appreciate feedback on is
the reflected face in the upper right. It intruigued me so
I enhanced it somewhat ... Cool, or too weird, or ... ?

Thanks all !



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I like the reflected face and don't think it stands out as too different with your enhancements.

I'm curious, though, about why you desaturated the photo. Other than the bluish light reflections here and there, the tones are in the neutral realm - browns, blacks, skin tones, and whites. I am wondering why that range of tones would need desaturating. I imagine it was a personal preference but if there is a reason in particular, I'd like to hear.

I like the composition with his face framed by the instruments. As for the eyes, I would prefer that he either be looking at the camera, or at the keyboard or music, being engaged with either you or the piano. As it is, he seems to be looking across the piano at something not relevant to what we are seeing.

Just my thoughts, of course. Technically the exposure looks great as well as the sharpness, so nothing to nitpick about there.
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I like the reflected face and don't think it stands out as too different
with your enhancements.

I'm curious, though, about why you desaturated the photo. Other
than the bluish light reflections here and there, the tones are in the
neutral realm - browns, blacks, skin tones, and whites. I am wondering
why that range of tones would need desaturating. I imagine it was a
personal preference but if there is a reason in particular, I'd like to hear.

I like the composition with his face framed by the instruments. As for
the eyes, I would prefer that he either be looking at the camera, or at
the keyboard or music, being engaged with either you or the piano. As
it is, he seems to be looking across the piano at something not relevant
to what we are seeing.

I had just returned from a very large public space that was finished
entirely in almost-white, almost-black, gray, and natural wood. It's
a severely minimalist palette.

I was prepping the full color version of this shot for conversion to
grayscale, and as I was working it, I got glimpses of how it looked
partially desaturated ... and it reminded me of the minimal colors
of the public space I had just visited.


In that space was a retrospective of paintings in the photo-realist
style ... which range from garish colors to low saturation. So, I was
up for messing with color saturation somewhere between full color
and monochrome.

I'm rather satisfied with my experimental result, but wondering if it
comes off as ghoulish or otherwise too weird for "the general public".


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As to the "mysterious" direction the subject's gaze, it's two-fold.
It's one part of the shot's overall oddness, which I was wondering
about, kinda slightly too spooky ? As for WHY he's looking neither
at the viewer [as in portrait tradition] nor at the music or keys [as
in where some players do look when playing] ... it's like this:

He's not playing solo and he's not in a duo or trio for blues or free
improv. He's in a rather formal sextet, playing some very precise
pieces. He has already played all the charts and so has no need to
keep his eyes on them constantly ... but IS keeping his gaze almost
constantly on the lead player who is also conductor. This is exactly
what he should be doing. His very focused expression tells us he's
not just absent mindedly staring, or resting his eyes, day dreaming,
or otherwise "just chilling". But, as you point out, there's nothing
in the frame solving the mystery of what is holding his attention.


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I spoze you're quite right that "the general public" would find it
too odd that he's looking intently at an unknown, rather than at
the viewer or at his chart or the keys. Combine that with the odd
color and it seems this is a real "niche market" shot ! [Not that I
sell prints, just a descriptive term].


Anywho, thaz the story about the color and of the subject's gaze.
Most of my stuff is peculiar or idiosynchratic. For 40 years it was
my job to juggle cliches, archetypes, and stereotypes. Thaz how
you do mass visual communications. You use well known, easily
read and understood "visual commodities" [aka cliches].

Now that I don't hafta do that anymore, I'm off in the very most
opposite direction whenever possible. This shot is part of a series
covering one performance. Shot about 130 frames, deleted about
5 or 6 and delivered the rest. "The rest" needed no editing at all.
No adjusting, no cropping. I'm a well oiled machine if the need is
for familiar, easily understood, communication by imagery. So it
was great fun ... for me ... to take one of the 125 "perfect cliche"
shots and kinda turn it on its head. Acoarst I do get to wondering
if anyone ... outside of a small circle of friends ... can stand to
look at this stuff !



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Thanks for the explanation, and it is wonderful that you're having fun and experimenting. I don't think this is 'too odd' at all; I was just looking at it intently with a more critical eye and those were the questions I had. You've answered them fully, and now I say, go have fun doing what YOU want to do!
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I think the desaturation would be fine if it were uniformly applied…. As is, his face just looks blotchy. I gather the purpose of the photo was to portray the intensity of the subject’s attention on the lead person. I think the reflection helps in that regard.
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I think the desaturation would be fine if it were uniformly applied….
As is, his face just looks blotchy. I gather the purpose of the photo
was to portray the intensity of the subject’s attention on the lead
person. I think the reflection helps in that regard.
Thanks for the observation especially about the variation
in saturation on the face. He was more distinctly side lit
than what you see here. It looked fine in full color. But to
prep for grayscale conversion I lightened the shadow side
of the face, which led to the uneven color. Shadows have
less color intensity so they retain less color during partial
desaturation ... regardless of adjustments to brightness
and/or contrast.

My lightening the shadow side paid back nicely in the full
grayscale version, but as you point out, at the halfway to
gray it results in uneveness of the reduced color. It seems
the prep for reduced color is a bit different than prep for
fully grayscale. Not any "one size fits all" ... more work.

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